Wednesday, March 14, 2012

Tankavision


Lying in repose
Grave words in memoriam
Tears fill silk and lace
I laugh out loud, singing you
Releasing your perfect soul

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Snacking on thin air
Large burdens carried upward
To God’s meeting point
Pristine slopes littered with souls
Who gave willingly, last breath

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In her chair knitting
Gram eyed the cat’s switching tail
And waited for it
The assault came, lightning speed
Yarn explosion, cue replay

19 comments:

  1. Hey, kiddo. I dont have an email address for you, but Grace said to contact the person who posted ahead of me at the tanka challenge, and since you and I are the brave first ones, that would be you! No idea what next month's challenge will be, but will try to remember it has something to do with you:)

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  2. Wow, I love yours! The second one is my favorite! I think you've got it~ I'm off to play with this exercise~

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  3. Well, done, and three so different. I love Gram, the cat, and the yarn explosion.
    I could only write three by continuing along the same line of thought.
    So...Sherry is to connect with you, and I'm to connect with Sherry, and you're to connect with someone as yet unknown or else, if the numbers don't work out (and why shouldn't they?) you connect with Grace. This is a very interesting challenge, because we all have a month in which to think about what happens next.
    K

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  4. "Snacking on thin air" I loved! What a great opening line.
    Great work.

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  5. I love your tanka....tears fill silk and lace...God's meeting point...and the last one is funny~

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  6. Three excellent contributions! Each one different,thoughtful.

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  7. A little bit of everything with these..loved the last one. I needed to smile.

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  8. My favourite is the first one - I think you really nailed the change between the haiku part and the final lines. The atmosphere is very richly felt with all the pieces.

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  9. Lovely tanka... I especially like the last one.

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  10. Oh, these are fabulous. My favorite is the last one. Nice to see these tankas today. You're good!

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  11. You completely rocked these...wow! So glad I don't read anyone's poetry until I'm done a prompt, or I would stay silent. I am in love with these!

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  12. All three of these are wonderful! I truly love the cat's attack on the yarn.

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  13. Ha!! Your third made me laugh! These are great. :)

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  14. i had to come and learn how to do this.
    number one is aces.
    the turn of tone in the last two lines is perfection.

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  15. The tears and laughter and memories captured my heart, and the yarn explosion I really enjoyed as my cats and I have been there many times. These are fun, thoughtful Tankas.

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