And in years past things were pat and justified
Lined out, little soldiers all in a row, shooting blanks and bowing
But now, christ sake, look in their eyes and consider running
Or at least take a pull on the flask and taste the barrel
Pulling the trigger may be the best thing you've done all day
Short of telling me that I'm beautiful
Chilling flavor in that metallic barrel...powerful imagery, Corey.
ReplyDeletecracking conclusion to a compact piece!
ReplyDeleteWow, your poem packs a short but strong punch! I especially love the title as I sit here waiting for the eye of a storm to pass I realize that even storms, though terrible at times, are beautiful too.
ReplyDeletepotent...well done!
ReplyDeleteWow, I can just feel the turmoil in this poem. Powerful stuff for sure!
ReplyDeleteAn intriguing title Corey considering that the storm is upon us ~
ReplyDeleteI specially like the last two lines, packs a punch for sure ~
um....(hesitant pause) then some shoe-gazing....will this poem marry me? I will present a dowry of three half filled composition notebooks, a mixed CD made for someone whom I can't even remember his name, half a role of quarters (laundry!!!), and a kitten named ramsay who chases everything. I like that this poem is a myriad of things, a cacophony if you will, of oddities when stringed together work exceptionally well. Lovely work and viva la.
ReplyDeleteyeah, run!
ReplyDeleteGreat piece! The eye of the storm is so scary. It makes me feel like.."get it over already..I am tired of wondering how it will end."
ReplyDeleteLittle soldiers all in a row. How simple things used to be. This is truly a delight -
ReplyDeletePotent, yes, but portent as well. Ya just give 'em a short, sharp, shock, dig it?
ReplyDeleteI love the thoughts and the scattered mood they enable~
ReplyDeletePowerful! YOU do know how to cast a spell ;D
This poem definitely packs a strong punch!
ReplyDeleteI can't stop reading and rereading this poem! It has me in its spell. Each word is just perfection!
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