Tuesday, January 1, 2013

Your Message

You uttered perfection with one word
And I climbed on to that word and glided
To the hearts and minds of all the men
Who listened patiently for fitting advice

You write the soul in textured minutes

You painted a stroke of ashen gray
And I carried it in my pocket, burning
To show these men what they were missing
With their misused policies and powerbroker mindsets

You write the mind in fractured havoc

You scratched the message of resolute trust
And I hurled it to the throng of hungry hearts
To teach these men of the power of love, blinding
With their post-coital regret and lustful craving

You write the heart in metered temptation

You inked a treatise of peace and meaningful tolerance
And I preached it from the top of the universal precipice
To show these men the importance of creation
Milking every drop of perspiration and understanding from historys' back

You write the stars in idealistic grandeur


  1. This is a beautifully written message Corey ~

    I like the weaving of voices, the idealist writing in the stars, and you sharing and echoing the voice ~ This has a spiritual slant for me ~

    Happy New Year and all the best ~

  2. What I like most about your approach to this piece is the I, you and them. The first person narrator seems to be an heroic character, armed with the strength, courage and love of his muse, and together they can fight titans.

    It reminds me very much of the Little Talks video by Of Monsters and Men. Have you seen it?


    That aside - I love the power of positive thinking in this poem...making the world a better place.

  3. This is so well-built, so admirably constructed, like a four-mast schooner in a bottle if you could actually hear the waves and seagulls. The construction is beautiful, and it enhances the piece and never gets in the way. This is some damn fine writing.

  4. loved it as usual.the italicised interludes were awesome.

  5. This is much the cool, my friend. Shout it in their ear until they hear.

    This reminds me of a song, too:


    Now, I'm off to investigate Kerry's!

  6. oooh if only. such a lovely manifest. were i the you, your readers might wish. :)

  7. You have such a way of building your writing, so many layers to them all. And this one is full of brilliant lines! I love the reality-bending climbing on a word and carrying around a stroke of ashen grey. An effortless rhythm in this piece, so well-crafted and classy as ever Corey haha

  8. Fantastic, Corey. What can I say that hasn't been said?