"From the racks to the stacks to the best on wax......"
Thursday, August 9, 2012
Here Comes the Sun
That bright
light That’s the
sun exploding baby boy
Yeah, I know
No shelter
gonna save us now
Let me have
one last look
The trees are
beautiful pop
Not the trees
son
Not the
trees
Oh, the heartbreak of father last conversation with son. You push to the heart of loss in so many of your poems, but seldom in so few lines. Very powerfully felt.
This IS very haunting. And likely will be the poem I take away from this topic, that will live on in my mind for some time.......Not the trees, son, not the trees.
And someday it will...explode, that is. I have a hard time believing there will be humans around by then, though if they are, I can see this scene very vividly--the last reality is that connection to our sinless, helpless innocent blood and bone, and your words here seem to me like one of the purest expressions of love. (Or I could be totally off base, but I still think the poem rocks.)
oh rowley, you have really done something spectacular here. I like where the prompt took you. As many have echoed, so brief, so tender, so warm and so sudden, much like a sudden bursting star. Only this piece shines brighter than that. Well done and viva la
This poem!! I hope we are with those we love. I hope we have time to talk, and then, I hope it is fast.
I'm finally listening to some of your music on this site: "breath smells like my favorite wine" nice stuff---but I like your full-bodied voice better than the spoken or whispered. "I can see it in your eyes..." "Fishing gear if we need it..." "sand from the beach is everywhere. . . ." "it took 2 minutes and it was gone" . . . I enjoyed the time I spent with your music very much!
Oh, the heartbreak of father last conversation with son. You push to the heart of loss in so many of your poems, but seldom in so few lines. Very powerfully felt.
ReplyDeleteNot the trees son
Not the trees..
Haunting.
This IS very haunting. And likely will be the poem I take away from this topic, that will live on in my mind for some time.......Not the trees, son, not the trees.
ReplyDeleteYou said it all so powerfully here. Wow.
A very powerful write, Corey, concisely conveying one last moment shared.
ReplyDeleteK
Scene set, story told, impact felt! Strong write, Corey!!
ReplyDeleteAnd someday it will...explode, that is. I have a hard time believing there will be humans around by then, though if they are, I can see this scene very vividly--the last reality is that connection to our sinless, helpless innocent blood and bone, and your words here seem to me like one of the purest expressions of love. (Or I could be totally off base, but I still think the poem rocks.)
ReplyDeleteWow...really what Kerry said...brevity punches here!!!
ReplyDeleteHaunting...last words between father and son. This will stay with me.
ReplyDeleteFather and son.... just lovely. Have you ever seen "Life is Beautiful"?
ReplyDeleteShort and powerful lines Corey ~ Great to see you ~
ReplyDeleteThis is amazingly powerful - concise and yet so deeply pulling at the heart strings. Wow.
ReplyDeleteIncredible write!!!
ReplyDeleteoh rowley, you have really done something spectacular here. I like where the prompt took you. As many have echoed, so brief, so tender, so warm and so sudden, much like a sudden bursting star. Only this piece shines brighter than that. Well done and viva la
ReplyDeleteThis poem!!
ReplyDeleteI hope we are with those we love.
I hope we have time to talk, and then,
I hope it is fast.
I'm finally listening to some of your music on this site:
"breath smells like my favorite wine" nice stuff---but I like your full-bodied voice better than the spoken or whispered. "I can see it in your eyes..." "Fishing gear if we need it..." "sand from the beach is everywhere. . . ." "it took 2 minutes and it was gone" . . . I enjoyed the time I spent with your music very much!
yes! i love this. ooooh the power of a shorter piece from you. excellent.
ReplyDeletep.s. i finished it, babyluv. what next!
Lovely verse!
ReplyDeleteThanks for your visits ~ I hope you are enjoying the last days of summer ~
ReplyDeleteTake care Corey and see you soon ~
Wow - very vivid poem - clip clops along so fast and delivers a real punch. It's wonderful how well you make the dialogue work. k.
ReplyDeletehey! i need something new from you!
ReplyDeleteOh that is summer with full punch I think.......
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